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Topic: Soul (07/13/06)
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TITLE: Inside my soul | Previous Challenge Entry
By Tiffanie Chezum
07/20/06 -
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
with secrets no one will obtain
A dark and distant prison cell
that helps protect me from my pain
I hide myself from all my fears
and feelings I refuse to share
The torment that these issues bring
is more than I can ever bear
Throughout my life I've built the walls
to give me a false sense of pride
The world may think that they know me but
I know they cannot see inside
For deep within this fortress strong
in solitude I’m forced to dwell
Staring out with longing eyes
while trapped within this secret hell
The guilt I feel will not subside
for past mistakes I now abhor
From years of suffering alone
I know there must be something more
I feel like no one understands
the emptiness consuming me
But I cannot tear down these walls
and now I fear I won’t be free
My spirit struggles to survive
while anguished thoughts my mind does churn
Still thirsting for a better life
but never knowing where to turn
As desperation fills my heart
I search for truth in my despair
Still needing help to find my way
I’m reaching out but no one’s there
So in my sorrow I will stay
buried deep within this hole
And hope that someday I’ll escape
the turbulence inside my soul
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"Still needing help to find my way
I’m reaching out but no one’s there"
I think another stanza with a glimpse of hope would help. But, perhaps I am missing the point the writer wants to make.
Well written.
If you aren't ready for a ray of sunshine, it can be too bright and cause you to turn away. Adding hope for the sake of hope, would be just like the pat endings readers are always thankful for not finding at the end of fiction.
Great job.