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This is a delightful story. I enjoyed the characters and dialog. Be careful of random capitalization, single quotation marks when a quote inside of a quote, and words like superheroes and battery's. The beginning pulled me in right away. I enjoyed the different conflicts. I can relate to wanting to be on time and also putting my wishes ahead of others. It's a great message. The topic is a bit hidden, but you do a nice job of pulling it in. And the ending was profound and thought-provoking.