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TITLE: We've All Got a Weakness; (It Could Have Happened to Anyone) | Previous Challenge Entry
By Wilma Schlegel
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A startled Adam turned toward the voice. "Who said that?"
"I did." The serpent served up a 'no-nonsense' look to go with his 'no-nonsense' answer.
Adam considered only briefly. So, the serpent can stand upright and talk to me(intelligently too). He's interested in me. Hmmm. "Yeah, I could eat something, what do you have in mind?"
"How about a nice piece of juicy fruit?" The serpent gestured toward the rich deeps of the garden.
"Chewing gum? Forget it, I was thinking of something more like a double cheeseburger." Adam longingly envisioned it - two hot, juicy, substantially meaty burgers covered in thick, melting cheddar. His mouth watered.
"Yeah, well," the voice called him back, "This is the Garden of Eden, we don't have cheeseburgers...but, how about that?" He swiveled his serpent head around 180 degrees, locked his yellow eyes on the brilliant ruby fruit, then slid them back in Adam's direction without turning his head back.
"That?! What's wrong with you? I can't eat that, you probably can't either. Get out of here!" Adam stood his ground and pointed for the serpent to leave.
"Hey, I'm here in this beautiful garden, too. Listen, I just meant to point out the chance for some refreshment. I could surely use some and that's worked for me before." The serpent managed to purse his lipless mouth as he moved his eyes off of Adam. "Never mind, then."
"Whoa, you've eaten that fruit before?... What did it taste like?"
"It's good... It's real good."
And Adam thought with his stomach.
"Eve, Sweety, you've got to try this." Adam held out to Eve the most gorgeous orb of fruit she'd ever been so close to.
Delighted, she smiled a sparkling smile up at him, she reached.
He tingled inside. This beautiful creature, made for him, was happy with him! What pleasure! Oh, he was a clever man!
She drew back. The smile disappeared. A deep crevice formed between her brows. Her eyes changed from sparkles of turquoise to cauldrons of boiling green.
He froze inside. He would surely die.
"What are you trying to do? Are you crazy?" She seethed fire at him.
"I wanted to share with you - I love you.....?" Adam sputtered out.
"Is that what I think it is? What are you doing and why? I can't believe this!" Eve threw him one question after another.
Does she want an answer? What have I done? What do I do now? How much trouble am I in? Why does death not come and get me? Adam's questions came one after another. Why were all the questions for him?
"Are you listening to me? What is going on in that head of yours? Do you even think about me? I'm your wife. Look at me. How could you do this?"
He started at her voice, desperate for some answer, any answer. "The serpent talked me into it," he remembered.
The cauldrons that were her eyes, darkened.
"He said it didn't hurt him," he explained further.
Darkened as dark as midnight.
"He said it tasted good," he worried.
"A serpent?!!!!! You've made the biggest mistake of your life because of a serpent? You talked to a serpent and somehow you and the serpent connected and you, oh great subduer of all things, you took a serpent's advice? You've destroyed us because of a serpent? But you can't listen to me, your help-meet?!!!! I don't want anything to do with you. Get out of my sight, you disgust me."
He stood there.
She turned and stomped back toward their home.
He cast around without hope for something to say, something to do... and then he knew, desperate times do call for desperate measures.
"Baby," he called in a final and tender appeal. "There could be some clothes in this for you."
She stopped dead in her tracks, her eyes flickering as she digested this interesting information, then she slowly turned, with one more question on her lips.
"And shoes?"
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Of course God did not give mankind cheeseburgers to eat until after the flood, but I suppose that should have been my clue. Great job.
And, while I realize that it's not the biblically correct sequence of events, it makes the good point that Adam was ultimately responsible for the fall as it was he that God tasked with the one simple thing he was not to do.
Great job!
God bless~