The Official Writing Challenge
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11/12/06
This was so vivid and engaging. I got a bit lost with what was going on, but it may have just been some distractions over here. I caught on fairly quickly once I could focus. Your description of your main character's feeling and thoughts was very engaging. Great writing!
11/16/06
An engrossing read. Your transitions into flash backs worked. You really engaged my emotions and made me care for both your MC and the mother and child.

11/16/06
Wow - so vivid. Your descriptions are powerful. Having spent a little time in the emergency department of a major Sydney hospital (as a carer, not a patient), I identify with the locked doors and need for security etc.

I suspect there is a touch of autobiography in there with the child with the teeth through his lip?!

This is a well-written tribute to those who risk their lives to bring health and healing.
11/16/06
Karen I enjoyed your descriptive writing so much. The first couple of paragraphs pulled me right in. Great writing!
You know, I'd love to read some more of your work.... You know how to make a reader feel stuff.