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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: PUNCH (08/27/20)
Tabitha Swift, AKA Amazing Girl, sat in the office of her church and listened as the head trustee, Tobias Whale, lectured her as to why she shouldn’t be volunteering to be on the church watch that was recently formed due to threats against it.

While the six foot plus man waved a meaty finger in her face, she fought the urge to use her density control powers to reach out and break his finger. Aside from it blowing her secret identity, she knew it wasn’t how Christ would have handled this officious man. He turned towards the pastor and bellowed, “Look at her, Pastor! I need men who can handle themselves in a fight. She’s what--a buck-ten?”

Finally, she couldn’t take the insults any longer. She spoke up forcefully, “My father, Mr Whale, is a police officer who has taught me self defense.”

When Whale turned back to her, shouting and pointing his finger at her again, Tabitha reached for his wrist and, without using her powers, twisted his wrist ceilingwards and pulled his hand towards his shoulder. Whale fell to his knees, and the pastor chuckled and spoke to the two of them. “Well, Mr. ex-Special Forces soldier, she can handle herself in a fight. I suggest we use her on the 8 to 10 o’clock shift.”

Whale grunted his acceptance through clenched teeth and Tabitha released his wrist. The rest of the meeting was spent discussing her responsibilities. She was also informed that the church would have video of the entire night, for her protection.

Tabitha thought to herself, ‘Video means I can’t duck away to switch to my costume,’ but simply nodded her head to indicate understanding.

She thought that leaving the meeting meant she was finished with Mr. Whale, but she was mistaken. He was there when she reported for duty, greeting her gruffly, “Nice trick you pulled this afternoon. Still wish we could’ve gotten a hold of that big Light Force guy.” Then he stalked back to his Suburban and drove away.

Tabitha settled into a folding chair and tried to get comfortable for the next two hours. The first hour passed without incident, but about 9:20 a group of men drove up and piled out of several cars. Some of them carried gas cans, and others carried fireworks and lighters.

Tabitha’s time on the Light Force gave her the confidence to speak boldly. “Okay, put the stuff down and drive away. No one needs any drama.”

Expecting to be ignored, she increased her density to its maximum, without growing any larger.

The leader, a man in a Free Palestine t-shirt, turned to his troops and shouted, “Little girl wants to act tough. Take her down and make it hurt!”

She shot back, “Go ahead, make my day.”

Two of the brawniest punks rushed her and she didn’t even swing a punch. Tabitha just let them run into her fists, counting on their super density to kayo them.

Upon seeing their friends go down so easily, several of the mob ran for their cars. The ones who felt that they needed to prove they weren’t afraid of a girl started towards her as she laughed in their faces, “That wasn’t even my best punchline. Who’s ready for some pain?” she taunted as she slipped into a fighter’s crouch.

Several punches later, all landed by her, Tobias Whale returned with several squad cars. His tone was extremely less belligerent than earlier. “I saw what you did. That took guts ... and skill. If you want to join the Rangers I got some contacts and might be able to get you in.”

Tabitha smiled up at the larger man. “No thanks. I just want to finish college and go into teaching. I’m glad to see you aren’t disrespecting a fellow believer anymore, though.”

The police loaded the woozy thugs into their squad cars. One of the first guys she had punched looked back at her and yelled, “This ain’t over, girl.” He continued to fill the air with obscenities.

The officer who was pulling him towards his squad car looked at the bruise on his arrestee and murmured, “If they’re all as tough as she is, you're safer staying away from this church.”

When she was relieved at 10:00, she slipped into her costume, her preferred attire for exercising her powers, and proceeded to patrol the city as Amazing Girl.
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Barbara Culler 
09/04/20
I loved this! I like how you explained why she had superpowers and how she was able to control herself. Well done!
John Custer
09/04/20
I enjoyed reading this article and assume it is fiction. If not, she needs to distribute her resume. Fun reading.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/06/20
This is a great story it pulled me in right away. I like that a "little girl" can do amazing things. There was one line I had to read a few times: My father, Mr Whale, is a police officer
I thought she was saying Mr Whale was her father, which left me scratching my head. A simple fix would be: "Mr Whale, my father is a police officer..."
I think you did a great job of infusing the topic throughout the entire story. It was an awesome read.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/10/20
Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 14 overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
Tana Craig
09/12/20
Loved Punchline. Do you have a whole series of AMAZING Girl? Being 5' in my youth and now having shrunk to 4'10" as an older woman, I love the thought of "densifying."

I was a fan of Wonder Woman many years ago. You sparked my imagination, plus made the point clear that we can have the power but, as Christ followers, choose not to use it.