The Official Writing Challenge
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05/25/15
It's quite nice and far better than I could do. but I'm uncomfortable with the use of "moil". It seems like a forced rhyme were the meaning of the word doesn't really fit the context. Other than that I like it, especially the "March on through the night"
05/26/15
Well-structured verse, with your title reappearing to keep us with your developing thoughts. Well done.
Exquisitely written. Thank you for the joy . . .