The Official Writing Challenge
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05/18/09
Oh… I wanted more. I've read how the little canaries were often the only bright spot in the life of a rural pioneer woman. What a dilemma… Your dialog seems very realistic.
05/18/09
An HONEST critique is both Good and Bad, (our topic this week). The Good is that I learned a Canary is used to check the air in a mine (or WAS used in earlier times). The bad is that I didn't like the "backwoods country accent", and although you nailed it to a "T"...it's just NOT my cup-of-tea, so to speak, for good reading. But well written nonetheless, with no solid ending, just a question mark for the reader to use their own imagination in solving the dilemma. Nice job and very creative, with a talent for accents.