The Official Writing Challenge
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11/24/06
I loved this story...especially how you broke it up into what Mama loved. Nice layout. I noticed a few punctiation needs and you might want to look at tenses and drop the had before the verbs -see if it reads stronger that way (just a thought:)) Very good ending and overall flowed smoothly.
11/30/06
What a trip down memory lane. Treasured memories. May I suggest that you vary the first word in your paragraphs. Most of them start with "Momma". God bless you.
How precious that memory of your mother's selfless prayer must be to you, and what a beautiful example she left you with. Thanks for sharing your portrait of a wonderful mom!