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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Doctor/Nurse (11/02/06)
Broken Soul
Come to the Doctor's home
for healing and love.

Water and blood
From His punctured side
He applies for
Healing and closure.

Sweat and blood
From the wounds in His brow
He generously swabs
To bring peace to a troubled mind
And new dreams for tomorrow.

Stretched forward in forgiveness
His nail scarred hand
unlocks chains and fetters
Tripping hobbled feet.

Broken Soul
Come to the Doctor’s home
and consider healing’s cost.

His price is steep
costing you all you have
Because His investment in you
Cost Him all He had.

Broken Soul
There is healing
In the Doctor’s house.

By His blood, yes.
By His wounds, of course.
At cost too high for some, so true.

But for you?
What cost is too high
To cure your lameness,
To open your blind eyes,
And bring sanity back to your thoughts,
And peace back to your sleep?

For an aching heart
There is no better surgeon.
For a Broken soul
There is no better mending
Then you’ll find
In the Doctor’s home.
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Monique Fox
11/13/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Jan Ackerson
11/13/06
Wow, this is really good! I particularly like the bit about the fettered feet.
Betty Castleberry
11/13/06
This is very good. The message is clear and it is very touching. Nicely done.
Joanne Sher 
11/14/06
You have some EXCEPTIONAL imagery here, Dave! This is so wonderfully tender and true and comforting - like the Doctor Himself! Wonderful work!
Donna Powers
11/15/06
This was very nice! I loved the flow of the poem, I and thank you for sharing it.
Sally Hanan
11/16/06
I agree with the great imagery you wrote into this piece. I think it would be even better reading if you only capitalized the beginning of your sentences, not lines, and if you kept all of the stanzas (other than the breaks) to the same number of lines. Well done.
Trina Courtenay
11/16/06
Great poem Brother Dave!
Val Clark
11/16/06
I particularly liked this progression, Dave: By His blood, yes./By His wounds, of course./At cost too high for some, so true. yeggy