The Official Writing Challenge
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07/28/11
Wow, I hardly know how to respond. Your staccato style lent itself to the shocking tone of the piece. Well chosen, well placed words, an occasional rhyme or alliteration, description of the scene - all pulled the reader into the unfolding drama. I assume you intended to convey the sick irony of all the hoopla over the murder of the doctor (even though we believe his murder was heinous and unjustified), but absolutely no response from the law officers or bystanders over the murder of the baby. I also assume this is from the woman's (the killer's) perspective. I like the form you chose for this entry - it's convincing and chilling.
07/29/11
That was on an entirely different level altogether. Great job of using the subject matter to portray a chilling tale of irony. I enjoyed it...I also wonder what the police were thinking about the dead doctor and the crimes he perpertrated during his reign. Interesting and a deep read. Nice Job! God Bless~
07/29/11
Oh wow! Brought tears to my eyes. A sobering reminder of a serious problem in our society...abortion! Thansk for sharing and God bless!
07/31/11
The distribution of your lines gives this an interesting impressionistic feel. There is also a certain boldness in the ambiguity your poem leaves concerning the murder of the abortionist--though I believe your first reviewer read your intent correctly. Intriguing piece.
08/01/11
Brenda has summed it up so well. Brutal and graphic portrayal of the issue.
08/03/11
Wow! I read this with bated breath! Through repitition, you mounted suspense, and still left me panting even at the end. The absence of punctuation marks makes it an even more interesting read. Brilliant work; brilliant message delivery. Well done!
08/03/11
Wow! I read this with bated breath! Through repitition, you mounted suspense, and still left me panting even at the end. The absence of punctuation marks makes it an even more interesting read. Brilliant work; brilliant message delivery. Well done!
08/03/11
Wow! I read this with bated breath! Through repitition, you mounted suspense, and still left me panting even at the end. The absence of punctuation marks makes it an even more interesting read. Brilliant work; brilliant message delivery. Well done!