The Official Writing Challenge
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08/05/10
I had a feeling Andy's equipment was a camera. You did a great job describing the beauty of a buck in the early morning sun. You subtly wove the topic into your vivid descriptions.
08/05/10
Ooooooh! I'm so glad it was a camera and a photo shoot. You did a great job of storytelling, and holding back on the MC's real intentions. Now, I'd like to see those photos :)
08/05/10
I loved this captivating and descriptive story. I would recommend switching the first two paragraphs, since the second paragraph leads directly into the tension, the scene, and the boy's mindframe.

But that would only be a slight adjustment on an already well-crafted piece.

Loved the suspense, the scenery, and the twist.

08/06/10
The sentence "Goliath shouldn’t smell him till after Andy got his long coveted shot" kind of clued me in to the fact that he wasn't after him with a gun (since he wouldn't be smelling anything if he was dead). Great story, great descriptions, and I'm glad there was no death at the end of it. :)
08/10/10
I absolutely loved the ending. Yay, I was hoping for a happy ending for everyone. My daughter is a photographer and I can't wait to share this story with her. In every way, this one is a winner in my book. I liked the intrigue and drama but, oh, how I loved the happy ending.
08/12/10
I was hoping he wouldn't shoot but so glad he did! You fooled me!!! Congratulations on your EC:)
08/12/10
Wow, such beautiful descriptions. You had me for a moment. I wondered how Andy was going to 'shoot' that buck after the regal descriptions, but then you surprised me. Loved it and congratulations.