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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of ďAll that Glitters is Not GoldĒ (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: It's Calling Me
By Yvonne Blake
01/26/08


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The wail of a whistle
Drifts oíer the breeze.
Its cries tantalize.
Itís calling me.

I want to fly free,
Not weighted down
By this iron plow.
Itís holding me.

Working, trudging,
Dusty row by row,
No achievement to show.
Itís choking me.

Tied to this farm,
Iíll never be loose,
To do what I choose
Itís crushing me.

Adventures and fame,
Gaiety, pleasures, ease
Oh, FatherÖ please?
Itís calling me.

The lights, excitement,
Friends, money, and wine,
Extravagance is mine!
Itís thrilling me!

Feast, mistress, or music
Laughing, dancing
What is your fancy?
Itís all on me.

Empty? Finished?
Friends turn away.
Come back! Stay!
Theyíre leaving me.

Hungry and shivering
Picking through trash
Sir, a bit of cash?
Itís shaming me.

Remembering home
Hearth, clothing, and food
But, Iím worth no good.
Itís humbling me.

MaybeÖperhaps?
A servant for hire,
To see home, my desire.
Itís calling me.

Father, Iím sorry.
This honorís reserved
Not mine, to deserve
Heís forgiving me.


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Joanne Sher 02/01/08
Love the repetition of the last word of each verse - very effective. Nicely done rendition of the prodigal.
Benjamin Graber02/01/08
I like this one a lot - it is a creative retelling of the parable of the prodigal son, written in a way we can all relate to.
Holly Westefeld02/04/08
Nicely done. Interesting form. I liked the progression of the MC's focus in the fourth line of each stanza. Being a creature of pattern, I might have liked to see lines two and three rhyme throughout.
Jan Ackerson 02/05/08
Very effective use of repitition with the "-ing me" throughout in the 4th lines. I liked this one a lot.
LauraLee Shaw02/05/08
Wow, how creative is this!!! I was tapping my toes to this clever rhyming example of the topic. Well done.
Laury Hubrich 02/05/08
Well written poem. I really liked this!
Laury
Celeste Ammirata02/17/08
Very well written poem. I love this take on the prodigal son story. Very imaginative.