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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: A DOMINOS EFFECT
By Marita Vandertogt
07/15/07


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A DOMINOS EFFECT


Jeremiah Jones never smiled. Said he didnít want to, had no reason to. Though his daughter Eva caught him once, or at least she thought she did, about 20 years ago, staring up at the sky, his head resting on the back of the old yellow rocker. The corners of his mouth turned slightly up, which, according to townsfolk, would have been almost impossible, since Jeremiahís face was frozen into a permanent frown, the wrinkles drawn deep down toward his neck, like a cartoon tree trunk.


But he never smiled. Donít really have any reason to, heíd say, if anyone ever commented. Smiling means youíre happy, and I just ainít happy. And heíd close his eyes and lay his head on the back of the rocker and move, in slow rhythmic motions, the sound of the wood on wood a gentle crunching in his ears, his old body molded deep into the chair and wait for Eva to bring him his afternoon tea.


But Jeremiah Jones didnít always not smile. At one time life was good and his face held nothing but the round cheek boyish looks that a constant grin gave him. He was happy all the time.


He was happy as a boy rolling around bales of hay and picking straw out of his pockets on hot summer afternoons on the farm. And he was happy as a young man, when he met her, smiling, off in the distance, the colour of her hair like the wheat he grew up around.


And he was most happy when they finally walked the aisle and said I do, her hand snugly fitting into his..


Jeremiah Jones smiled when his daughter Eva was born, when her fingers curled around his own, holding tight. He smiled when Joshua, and then Michael came into their lives. And every night, when the sun disappeared from the western sky, he would sit with Elizabeth in front of the fire. They would read and pray together, and in the warm glow of the firelight, would weave their fingers together and create one hand, extending it upward in a symbol of thankfulness to a God who blessed them with so much.


Until one day.


Elizabeth didnít see the car coming through the intersection. Josh and Michael sat in the back seat, singing a song too loud for their motherís ears, and she turned around, for just a split second, to quiet them down, just long enough to not see the truck.


Jeremiah Jones didnít smile again, from that day on. Had no reason to, heíd tell people. The God of his blessings had cheated him. Smiling people are trusting people, heíd say. And I donít trust Him no more.


And Eva lived the shadow life around him from that day on. Her own face drawn, afraid to betray his grief with any joy of her own, eventually turning down a proposal of marriage and a chance to live her life outside the walls of a very small town. I have to take care of him, was her explanation. After all, sheíd say, her head bent down when she spoke about it, I didnít die in that crash. I wasnít even there. God must have spared me to take care of him, and thatís what Iím doing.


Years passed in the quiet home, and eventually Jeremiah Jones passed on. He never went back to the God of his blessings with Anna. Some say it was most understandable. And on the day of his burial, Eva placed a small bouquet of orange and yellow marigolds on his grave with a very odd note. ďI guess I wasnít enoughĒ attached to the vase. That same day she moved away. Nobody knows where to.


Jeremiah Jones made a choice a lot of years ago, and eventually that choice made him. But it didnít stop with just him. The choice made Eva as well.


And it could have been so different.


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Virginia Gorg07/19/07
Interesting and thought provoking. I was confused - was Elizabeth in a car or a truck? This article should make us remember Job, too - look what he lost, then gained back.
Ed VanDeMark07/20/07
This is a good story but it's a dark story. While I usually prefer stories with happy endings we all need an occasional reminder from the other side of reality. While sermons that focus on love are generally the way to go, a periodic fire and brimstone sermon is good for the soul. This is exceptionally well written. Thank you.
Lynda Schultz 07/21/07
How many Evas are there out there, with crippled lives because they tried to fill shoes that weren't made for them. A sad story, but a meaningful and appropriate message. Good work.
Kristen Hester07/22/07
Wow. This is very good and powerful.

Just a few comments: I think you might have written Anna where you mean Elizabeth at the bottom. I'm not sure. Also, there are a few places where some quotation marks might be helpful.

This is a great story! Good job.