The Official Writing Challenge
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05/26/06
One tiny concern: How did he get the book back from his uncle? I think "she was being drug" should be "she was dragged". Other than that bit of pickiness, this is a wonderful story. Great job.
05/27/06
Very good story, well told. GOod job
Tim, I'm so glad you won! Congratulations, it is well-deserved. (I hope other FW's will visit your neat website!)

One thing I would have liked is some clue about the fate of this precious mother. Maybe I'm dense, but was she executed?

God bless you! Your'e on your way up!
06/02/06
Congratulations, Tim! This is a well-deserved win. You certainly know how to pull a reader right into your story. Dynamite writing--God bless you.