The Official Writing Challenge
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What a lovely story. . .
04/20/19
Aww, what a happy ending to the story! Too many times, we miss the miracles in our lives because we're not focused enough on what God can do. This piece could use a little polish, as far as some punctuation, and words like "thru" that should be spelled out. Overall though, you had good descriptions and the story flowed relatively well. Thanks for sharing!
04/22/19
Interesting story. I felt some confusion, however. I guess Esther was an Angel? I've never heard the name Phibbo before, and wondered how to pronounce it- maybe a play on words like
Fee-ble? With some re-working, this could be a really great story.