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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Personal Peace (06/01/06)
Me: Looking for personal peace in the want ads? What was I thinking?

Me: Steaks don’t roam. You: But they can travel.
Me: Yeah, pretty amazing that you can have meat shipped to your house. $20 an hour to work for a company that sells beef through mail order sounds intriguing.

You: How would that be better than being in charge of inventory for a small cellular phone company that is closer to home?

Me: No one would want a Pink steak. You: But some people like their steaks pink in the middle.
Me: Steaks don’t have batteries that will die; ring tones won’t freeze the screen on the steak.
They wouldn’t be able to talk on their steak driving down the road.
They can’t get to the Internet from their steak.
It is pretty hard to lose a steak or run it through the washing machine.
Not the right kind of accessories? They can get a whole meal delivered to their door!

You: What if there is a “misteak”? Me: Steak mistakes can be fixed. Dry ice is wonderful that way.

Me: No one will miss an important call from his or her steak. You: But what if they don’t arrive in time for a dinner party?
Me: There is always the grocery store. You: What if the store is closed? Me: Is it life or death? Have a bologna sandwich!

Me: No one will ask me to try to fix his or her steak. You: Yes, but they may ask for instructions on how to prepare it.

Sadly, me: What do they say about the grass being greener? On the other side? Yes, you’re right there would be another whole set of challenges with a new job. I guess this means I have to look deeper for my piece of peace.
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Jan Ackerson
06/09/06
I like the casual interplay between the two conversants here (husband and wife?)--they seem to know each other's thoughts and to have "inside" jokes.

However, in order for your readers to be "in on" the conversation, maybe you could help us out a bit--may some action in addition to the dialog, so that we know exactly who's talking and why "me" is looking for a job?

There's lots of good stuff here, witty and cute.
Michelle Burkhardt
06/09/06
Cute title!
Carla Feagans
06/09/06
I like the title and the message of looking deeper (and that the "meat" of the matter really isn't meat).

Good use of dialogue, but I was wishing there was a little more.