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I loved the interplay between the husband and wife. This story was very gripping and held my attention. Next time space between paragraphs. Thank you
11/20/10
Well done--I was definitely engaged by your MC and his dilemma.

Since this piece was almost entirely dialogue, I missed out on action and description that would have helped me to visualize this scene, and to get to know your characters better.

Great ending, and a very good entry.
11/22/10
Great story! Very interesting and your characters feel very real.
You did a good job with this and told a so very important message. God does watch out for us when we let him. There are many news articles that are nothing more than gossip too. Great dual messages!