The Official Writing Challenge
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09/06/05
Works fairly well. Kind of abrupt in the close, but the story is complete.
09/07/05
Work on beginning sentences with different words (She...), and on ceosistently using -ed endings. The story is powerful and captures Laney's emotions very well. Loved the Divine intervention!
09/07/05
Sorry, typo. I meant "consistently."
09/07/05
A good story of healing -when we let God in to do what He wants to for us.
09/08/05
Your character's happy facade versus her inner turmoil was very real. God Bless, Karen
What a lovely message of hope for those experiencing pain and despair. Just a few typos - namely words missing 'ed' endings. But a well written piece overall.