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By Zac James
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Today was the day. Today was her day.
She had worked with her mother and soon-to-be mother-in-law to make sure that everything was just the way that she had dreamed. The chapel was exquisitely adorned with white ribbons, yellow and pink flowers and a beautiful trellis that evoked images of fairy tales and wedding day brides. The tables were lost underneath the white cloth and lace beneath them. The invitations were just the way Stacy wanted them- formal and classy. The chapel was barely going to be big enough for all the people they invited. Even the Baldwin piano had recently been tuned. Everything was as ready as it could ever be.
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David Richards was trying to squash the butterflies in his stomach while he put the finishing touches on his tuxedo. His tuxedo was spotless and pressed, his bow tie gently tugged to create a dapper impression. He thought about the ceremony the wedding party had rehearsed and chuckled. Something was bound to go wrong- Don Ryan, the pastor might stumble over a word or two, the cameraman might forget to press "Record" or the unity candle might snuff out. He didn't expect perfection. He just hoped for it.
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Susan Rumple, Stacy's mother, was by the back door of the chapel, waiting, along with the bride and bridesmaids. All hearts were joined in eager anticipation for the joy they felt creeping over them, the joy that was so near, they could almost taste it.
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David Richards stood on the small wooden stage waiting...waiting...waiting. He could not wait to marry Stacy. But he had to.
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Stacy Rumple, in her wedding dress of dreams, trembling (and giggling), tried to quietly a straight line walk down the aisle. A drunk might have had a better time with it.
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David watched Stacy step, step, step onto the chapel stage and he felt her presence to his right as Don Ryan began the art of two becoming one.
And then the unthinkable happened.
A girl rose up from the pews, stepped over a few people and walked up next to Stacy and quietly took her hand.
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All eyes were on this unknown girl, including and especially Stacy. She glared at the girl as she whispered, "What are you doing?!"
The girl looked at her and said, "David knows, I think."
As all eyes turned to David, another girl stood up. She walked forward as two more stood up and took their place next to Stacy as she tried to figure why they were ruining her wedding. Stacy quickly turned to David, hoping he didn't know what she was talking about.
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David was visibly sweating, and saw Stacy begin turn to him, desperately hoping that she somehow wouldn't ask about what was so blatantly out of place.
"David, who are these girls?"
David lost all hope at that moment in the fabrice of time.
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Stacy looked expectantly at David, and desperately prayed he had a good answer for this. He ran his hand through his hair as he said, "Well...these were girls I used to date. Girls I used to think I was going to marry."
Stacy's heart shuddered.
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David dreaded every word of what he was about to say.
"I gave them my heart back then...but they don't mean anything now."
He watched Stacy's composure crumble, as she whimpered, "I thought you gave your heart to me."
He looked into her eyes.
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David looked into her own eyes and said, "I've given you everything I have left."
Stacy began to cry, to sob, to wail. And she fled the chapel, horrified by what she had not been told.
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One thing that somewhat detracted was the paragraph dividers. If you could find a way with your words to flow from one section to another, it might be better.
I could see this article as a discussion starter for a group studying chastity or purity. Or maybe for an adult group studying their individual relationship to the Lord. Great job! Loved the description of the bride's joy in your opening.