The Official Writing Challenge
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I totally enjoyed this poetic piece. I liked how you repeated the word solider. It really fit and made the article feel more intimate. The one thing I noticed was you started one sentence with you, but then in the second part switched to we. You definitely nailed the topic while delivering a powerful message. Your ending was great. It left me with a sense of peace inside.
05/28/15
You have some great thoughts here. I would like to see you expand them - perhaps with some examples, some short incidents, etc. that will give your reader something more to relate to their own life.