The Official Writing Challenge
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This is SO adorable, filled with humor and memories alike. I'm not just still smiling as I write this...I am grinning and probably look like a close second the the Cheshire Cat! Thank you for this uplifting and lighthearted refreshment.
I like this--the writing is good, the trip down memory lane is heart-warming and tender. I must say, however, that this covered a number of senses, so it ends up not being precisely "on topic." Picky of me, I know. I would have enjoyed having the "taste" thought expanded, and less of the other senses. Just my POV.
I so enjoyed this kissing experience with you (wait that sounded wrong). But you did a great job describing the different tastes of a kiss, it brought memories flooding back to my mouth. The coffee drinker or the absolute worse was the smoker, pleasant memories came back as well. This is a sign of good writing if you can pull the reader in and make your story a part of mine.
07/30/10
This is a "been there, done that" memory. Congratulations on your HC.
God Bless.
I loved this! Great job.