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Topic: It's a Colorful World (12/03/09)
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TITLE: Enraptured Imagery | Previous Challenge Entry
By Barbara Culler
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Watching the rising tide;
My Imagination took me
For a colorful ride
I found myself in a meadow
Daisies, yellow and white
Swaying in the summer breeze
Lifting, three feet in height
Up above the blooming pasture,
Hovered a red-orange sphere
Surrounded by a pink and gold sky,
I was uplifted with cheer
Flittering around the heavens
Then resting on a cloud
I heard an angelic choir
Sing praisingly and loud
There was scarlet and green confetti
Floating in the sapphire sky
I saw dozens of tiny rainbows
Swirling up ever so high
I felt at peace, and joy was full
The calm lulled me to sleep
I then awoke back on the beach
The air cold, the night deep
I did not want to go away
I said I’d return tomorrow
To imagine my hope for joy
And to forget my sorrow
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Just a few tweaks of the rhythm and meter would really polish this up.
You chose a great title for this rich-in-imagery poem.
Well done Barbara!
Colin
For meter suggestions: lines one and three in a four-line poem need to have the same number of syllables and have stresses (accents) the same--as do lines two and four. If you use couplets, they need to have same number of syllables and have stresses the same.
Example:
I languished alone at the beach,
To watch the rising tide;
Imagination carried me
Through colors on a ride.
(Some words don't fall into meter easily--like colorful).
I flitted round the heavens
And rested on a cloud
To hear angelic choirs
Sing praisingly and loud.