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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: LUST (all-consuming desire; excessive craving) (01/08/15)
I have this desire. Some may call it an addiction. To me it’s normal. I have dealt with it, or something like it, for as long as I remember.

I get this feeling. My breath catches, my stomach aches, my chest swells up, it feels like my heart wants to explode. I’ve always pushed it down, told myself “No Darcy, this is bad. Stay away.” But even after I do that my thoughts always go right back. As if they are teasing me. My brain is the moon and my thoughts the aliens; they belong there or so they tell me.

Aliens belong on the moon and that makes sense.

But I used to be the only one on the moon; my thoughts were my own. They weren’t always like this. They were pure. But what changed? What made me the person I am today? The person who no matter how hard she tries can’t shake these thoughts. No, the aliens are the invaders. I am the one who belongs here.

Now that I know, I am afraid. The aliens who once seemed so peaceful are now villains. They harass me; they dangle their ideas making them linger until they become my own. I am in no place to fight them. I could never do it.

Am I stuck? Trapped? I think so. I see no light at the end of the tunnel. In fact, I am spiraling downwards. My everyday life is being overrun with these thoughts. I crave them now. They have turned into a drug that keeps me going. I need my daily dose. Where is my freedom? When will I break free from my mind? How can I break free of my mind? Is it even possible?

I don’t know.

I. Don’t. Know.
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Sheldon Bass 
01/15/15
This powerful piece, to me, screams a cry for help, understanding, and a way out—freedom from oppression. It arouses a familial emotion common to those who haven't yet discovered 'complete' freedom in Christ. "My mind is not my own."

I'd love to see this piece continued to include a contrast between a before mind and an after. After: "a transformation by the renewing of our minds".

This entry would fit well as an example with many bible teacher's and theologian's writings on "The fortress of the mind" or "Battlefield of the mind."

Keep up the good work.

Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/15/15
Wow what an intense piece. This evoked all kinds of emotions in me. I think we can all relate to that alien feeling. I felt like reaching into the page and wanted to just hug the MC and protect her. I think you did a fine job of nailing the topic and making the reader stop and think. Great job.
C D Swanson 
01/15/15
Wow- well written and I agree with Sheldon. Excellent writing, compelling with an authentic tone of wanting to "escape the darkness" and break into the peaceful "Light..."

God bless~
Toni Babcock 
01/17/15
Great imagery. The MC seems to be combatting an obsessive compulsion to sin by thought. This is a common scheme of the devil to convince someone they belong to him instead of to Christ. In that torturous place, he paralyzes the soul from attempting to be an influence for Christ and the gospel. Have your MC get mad at the devil and conquer him with the Sword of the Spirit which is God's word.
Paula Richards
01/19/15
This spoke very deeply to my own life. It perfectly conveys how we feel but are so often inadequate in articulating our feelings. Well done! Excellent writing!