The Official Writing Challenge
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Difficult times make good topics.

Work on the connection between the incident and the Bible lesson taught.

Very good Bible verses.
This is a powerful testimony. I can totally relate,having suffered severe pain for 24 years. I think your opening introduces the conflict and pulls the reader right in. Make sure you start a new paragraph each time a new person speaks,even if it's just one word. You did a great job of transitioning from your story to the message. It's one we all need to be reminded of from time to time. Good job, I look forward to reading more of your work. You really made me stop and think.
07/23/13
Powerful witness and testimony, bringing the reader in, and creating emotions and bringing a powerful message forward.
Thank you.


God bless~
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