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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)
Oh, God, the pain! I can barely breathe. How long? It could be days!

BAM! BAM! BAM!

Poor soul, what could he have done to deserve being nailed to his cross? I need to breathe. Lift yourself, breathe!

BAM! BAM! BAM!

Why did I listen to my friend? My friend? He’s here with me on the other side of that bloody mess they are nailing. Some friend he is. Breathe! Oh, the pain!

BAM! BAM! BAM!

Why a crown? A crown of thorns no less, he must have really made someone angry. Breathe, come on, and breathe! Lift and breathe!

BAM! BAM! BAM!

Here come the Pharisees, why would they be here? Perhaps to plead my case! “Oh, righteous ones hear me, please! I am innocent; I believe in Jehovah, I am a son of Abraham. Please help me down!”

“Come down from that cross if you are the Son of God,” spits a white robed scoffer.

Son of God? Is this Him? Why is He here?

“Yes, if you are the Son of God rescue us and yourself!” A mocking plea cries from “the friend”.

“Father, forgive them for they know not what they do!”

He’s asking for them to be forgiven? Is it really Him? Is it? As thoughts of pain and breathing wane.

He is not coming down; I remember hearing Him once. What was it? Yes, as Moses lifted up the serpent in the wilderness so must the Son of God be lifted up. Is it Him?

“Remember me when You enter into Your Kingdom.”

“Truly I saw unto you: today you will be with me in Paradise.”

Thank you Lord for revealing to me what I’ve sought after all my life. Isn’t He beautiful?!

“It is finished!”

Yes, I will see You shortly my Lord! Breathe, yes, breathe for now I have life!
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/21/11
This is a brilliant, well-written piece about the crucifixes and I feel like I'm right there. However I totally missed the topic in this piece.But the message is profound.
Leola Ogle
10/22/11
Great reminder of the Christ of His sacrifice on the cross! Nicely done! God bless!
Linda Goergen
10/22/11
What a vivid and powerful account of the repentant thief on the cross! Was the topic in this piece, his mind a search engine, searching for answers as he hung there? At any rate, his search for truth was over and his last breath meant new life with Jesus! Enjoyed this.
Patricia Protzman
10/22/11
I'm afraid the entry did not fit the topic even though it is a powerful story of the repentant thief. Well-written oherwise.
C D Swanson 
10/22/11
Great job, and well -written. It brought me to the place and time, nicely doen. God Bless~
Edmond Ng
10/25/11
This story seen from the eyes of the other who chose Christ while on the cross reminds me of an article I wrote, 'At the Cross.' In it, I mentioned that I often wonder how the thief hanging on the cross next to Jesus dramatically change from being cynical to a convert. What did Jesus do at the cross that change the criminal so amazingly within that short span of time? You've conveyed in this story the answer to the missing link.
Terry Lee
10/25/11
This is a beautiful piece. I can only imagine you wept tears of both sorrow and joy as you wrote it.
Danielle King 
10/25/11
This was very graphic and drew me right in. An excellent piece of work. Unfortunately the boards stated that it had to be about a computer search engine but that doesn't detract from the skillful way in which this was written.