The Official Writing Challenge
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10/21/06
An interesting story and you kept me guessing right up until the "phantom" was revealed. Nice job!
10/23/06
Got terribly confused in the knock down, drag out scuffle, but "came to" in the end and enjoyed the ending. Kinda like a Sci-Fi story...some typos and missed words, but overall a good write, and a suspenseful read. Good Job.
10/23/06
Wonderful story. Very creative, but I did get a little confused in the scuffle. Other than that, I found it to be very well-writen. It won't be long before we see you in the Intermediate level.
10/24/06
Maybe if we'd had some kind of introduction to Dalton before hand, it wouldn't have been as confusing. I liked the reaction when he 'knew' he was going to die. Keep up the good work.
11/01/06
Interesting story idea. I agree that parts were confusing and difficult to follow. I would've liked more background on the daughter and more info. on the partner. The scuffle scene could have used a bit more description as well.
11/01/06
Interesting story idea. I agree that parts were confusing and difficult to follow. I would've liked more background on the daughter and more info. on the partner. The scuffle scene could have used a bit more description as well, but it was an interesting read.
11/01/06
Interesting story idea. I agree that parts were confusing and difficult to follow. I would've liked more background on the daughter and more info. on the partner. The scuffle scene could have used a bit more description as well, but it was an interesting read.
11/01/06
Sorry about the triple entry. I think I went "mouse crazy" Oops! =)
I liked this. Very different. But very good.