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TITLE: Here's to One
By Floyd Jordan
05/21/06
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Um, usually i try to give some kind of idea of what i think this would sound like if it were placed to music. SO yeah, this is a slow, kinda introverting song that has a pick up to really heavy at the end. My impression is that it sounds like a mix of Reliant K's "Never Underestimate my Jesus" with a mix of Mercy Me and Mewithoutyou.
The parenthesis are thrown in phrases that are kind of but not really part of the song
Here's to One
-Floyd
A progressive style of Lyric, Largo time


One smooth motion
takes it all away
One gladsome feeling
puts your being away

one away one away
When did he learn to stay? (cause that's why he ran)

One grievous action
A Dreamer awakes
One body breaking
Crushes Hell in it's wake

One awake One awake
When did he learn to sleep? (cause he's at peace!)

But would you believe him?
Would you percieve it?
That a control that binds him
is a bound by a control
and a law that looses it
loses a law in a loose withdrawl


That's a man.
one and one make one,
Again
And again
and Again
and again

and Again I will accost with fear in my eyes
as one walks in disgust with no fear in his eyes
Only to come home
Only to come alone
A life is shorn

And again I will pray with faith i find right
as i kneel more like allay with my faith I hold tight
Only to feel my blood run
only to feel the shun
Alas I am undone


That's a man
one and one make one (only one)
Again and Again-Again and Again
And again

Laws, like the equations, speak imaginations
It's not like emotions that forever they die
And what that insinuates, sinew-ates me

You said you'd subtract all the things that i lack
and what is lacking will make me die
and what that entails, is telling me

one and one can make man
And one alone can make man
And this one doesn't have to be
"If he'd come ask of me"

So One and Only One make me
So one doesn't have to be lonely
So one as I am can be loved
So one as I am is lovely

One up there subtract me
One up there em-power me
One up there add unto me
So One up there will equal me

So that one down here will let go of he
So that one down here is purity
and ONE
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