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Previous Challenge Entry
Topic: Breaking the Rules (08/16/04)

TITLE: Take Two Tablets (and call me in the morning)
By Al Boyce
08/16/04

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Rules are complicated things
Though simple they may seem
They paint what's right and wrong for us
In life, or on a team

They help us stay within the bounds
Of decency or law
Yet often we ignore them all
Alas, our species' flaw.

We broke the first one long ago
(Though since we haven't quit)
"As for the tree of knowledge
Thou shalt not eat of it"

One bite was all we needed, for
Once we had tasted sin
Like rabid dogs we wanted more
Of all things forbidden

God then handed down ten laws
To bring us back to heel
But to those who can't keep one
Ten is no great deal

We're funny, though we don't like rules
We still make up our own
For golf and soccer, games of cards
And then we all bemoan

No matter how we legislate
Each contest or track meet
As long as humans are involved
We'll find a way to cheat.

And those who through their merit try
To re-enter the Lord's flock
Find their self-made righteousness
Is just a stumbling block

At long last God has come around
His rules are back -- to one
Life eternal, free to those
Who embrace His only son.


Member Comments
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Sheila Boyd08/23/04
Good poem, verses 7 and 8 were a bit off rhythm when read aloud they did not flow as well as the others. It showed real talent, good insight.
Melanie Kerr 08/23/04
I love the title. The peom was very clear and easy to read.
Joanne Malley08/23/04
Very nicely written poem. It is hard to make a poem with such "meat" rhyme so well. Good job.
Norma OGrady08/23/04
We broke the first one long ago
(Though since we haven't quit)
"As for the tree of knowledge
Thou shalt not eat of it"
I love poetry
This was a great poem
It said it all.
great write
Yeshua bless
Lucian Thompson08/24/04
So true…so true; nicely said!
Annette Bury08/25/04
Wonderful poem - It really flows and I love the title!
L.M. Lee08/25/04
nice poem. Poets always impress me! :-)
Rose Gingerich08/28/04
Very nice poem. Good message as well as nicely done. Blessings!