The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/20
Wow! What an imagination.
11/01/20
Oh, I would love to see this in a live-action movie! Train running across on her legs! Wow!
11/20/20
there is some great imagery here, however, I found this story extremely difficult to follow. The hook should be more concise to set the pace and tone of the story. Also, the conclusion seemed out of place, as there is no mention of Christ anywhere else in the story. So often, less is more, especially in an action-packed story. Quick words help pull the reader into quick movements, quick assessments and quick decisions on the part of the protagonist. Hope that helps!