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08/29/19
Awww. That would be a tough situation to me in. I like the way your brought the physical interactions into your story- well done!
08/29/19
So much truth in this story. The reader immediately feels empathy for the bemused grandma! For critique, I would suggest you drop both "Can of worms". The reader doesn't need the writer to state the obvious. However, The sentence:"There are more worms crawling out of the can" is very colorful and descriptive. Good job!
09/02/19
I like this. It's definitely a sticky question for her.

I agree with the previous comment about not needing to use "can of worms" too much. You're point is well made without stating it. But as stated, that line about "more worms crawling out of the can" is great!

Good job with this.