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02/05/16
Good little story. I'm not sure you need the first paragraph of explanation. Your second par. begins the scene which is where I think you want to start. Just my thoughts. God Bless
02/05/16
This preacher shared an important message--Hear and accept the word wherever that might be.

I would have started this piece with the second paragraph, and maybe added where you got the idea for the story as a footnote. There is a misplaced modifier in the first paragraph. It sounds like the person accepted Christ just by driving past the church.
02/05/16
Thank you for a powerful message. Well done.

God bless~
02/07/16
I liked your story, and what the preacher decided to do. I was a bit confused when you shared the Bible verses. Maybe another paragraph before you wrote the "teaching" part of your message, could have continued the story as the voice seemed to change?