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02/02/12
Beautiful job of depicting the struggle to stay "afloat" in today's economy.

I felt the MC's pain as she called out to God - who is ALWAYS there for all of us. And, then after being with God alone in her prayer space - how revitalized she felt, sensing God's love and feeling His comfort.

I loved it. God Bless you~
02/02/12
What a wonderful and so very realistic story of struggle and triumph through faith. I too could really feel the MC's pain and frustration but love the way you wove the story with her turning it all to God.

I'm gonna be humming that Sonny and Cher tune now for days ... thanks! ;-)
Very real story.
Instead of telling background info try working it into action and dialogue.
Well done