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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Twilight Years of Life (07/02/09)
Drawn by enticing, shimmering lights,
That sparkled like a precious stone,
I closer drew to see their sights
And danced into the twilight zone.

I tried with equal grip indeed
To hold day’s truth and twilight’s draw,
And noted not daylight recede
While evening beckoned more and more.

With growing crowds I laughed and played
Music and laughter in my ears.
I didn’t see the daylight fade,
I lived now in the twilight years.

I stumbled blindly through each day
Distorted shadows filled my sight.
I looked in vain to find the way,
While twilight darkened into night

A busy life, no time to think,
Frenetic fast activity,
I felt the lights of twilight sink
Into a dark depravity.

Then I recalled the days of light,
The peace of heart, the Word of Truth,
The daylight sun, the hours so bright,
My child-like faith, my trusting youth.

And through the piercing gloom I heard
With deep still voice, from far away,
A call of love, a wondrous word,
And Christ restored me to ‘the day’.
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Josiah Kane
07/11/09
It is tiring to keep reading poems that just rhyme, but don't have the rich metaphors an images poetry really needs, and happily this was not such a piece. I thought it was particularly good for the first 4 verses, but the last two (unfortunately those in which the message of redemption was proclaimed) slipped away a bit from your running parallel to the sundown and hence the power of the gospel to reverse that trend wasn't brought out quite as powerfully as it might have been. Nevertheless it was a nice poem with a strong theme, so well done.
Mona Purvis
07/12/09
What a message in this well-written poem! I love everything about it.
Mona
Deborah Porter 
07/18/09
Hi Margaret. You may already know this, but I just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, The Backslider, actually did very well in the Twilight Years Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 3, placing 6th in that Level, and also placing 22nd in the highest rankings overall. Well done.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=26236

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

Hope to see you at the FaithWriters' Conference in August. It’s going to be an amazing time of inspiration, information and encouragement. (If I’ve already mentioned that to you, forgive me. We’re just so excited about letting members know about this great gathering.)
http://www.faithwriters.com/conference.php

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)