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TITLE: Lost in the Past | Previous Challenge Entry
By Benjamin Graber
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Lost in the pages of time
Wandering in my regret;
Trapped in my thoughts of the past,
Trapped in the valley of fret…
Searching for light in the dark:
Hope in a past full of pain;
Walking in circles, I find
Horror in my own disdain…
Walled in by mountains of shame
All paths are funneling down,
Sorrows grow bigger each day
Focused on yesterday’s wounds…
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Finding escape from the gorge
In the ascent from the past—
Christ has redeemed yesterday
Giving a map to the lost;
Life was not meant to be lived
Focused on pages gone by,
Sins have been drowned in God’s grace
Now he presents us the sky!
Fly in the blue of God’s plans,
Letting regrets fall away,
Live in the freedom from shame
Jesus has offered Today!
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I'm just wondering if maybe a more postitive title would be better (your title is very poetic, though). The second half of your poem is filled with hope. Or maybe a title that reflects both thoughts. Just a thought.
I really like this stanza. "Finding escape from the gorge In the ascent from the past— Christ has redeemed yesterday Giving a map to the lost;" Your poem is well thought out. Nice writing.
Laury