The Official Writing Challenge
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11/15/05
What a beautiful picture you have painted of Eden before the Fall. The images brought to life all that God created for man before he made that disobedient choice.
11/15/05
Wow! Beauty personified! Your pen is a paintbrush of color, light and pictures in motion - just beautiful.
11/16/05
A beautiful read of a talented writer's offering.
11/16/05
Beautiful, just marvelous! Clapping hands here!
Loved the way you used "In beauty Eden lay" for the beginning of every stanza except one. And the last stanza - ouch! Beautiful and powerful. Well done.
11/17/05
Yes, that last stanza's got punch! Great job on this!!!
11/17/05
Beautiful. Then sobering at the end. What a great reminder to us of what we are missing out on when we make bad choices.
11/20/05
Beautiful expression of what might have been! And a foreshadowing of what is now. Sigh. Excellent work. yeggy