The Official Writing Challenge
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Very well said and written. We are never the same once we know the Savior.
05/20/11
But He's coming back!!!!...
Sorry but I just had to say that after reading all the "he left" phrases! LOL LOL

But yes, He left to do the Father's will..for you and me and us all...
and you have shone that well in this poem! Enjoyed!
05/21/11
My favorite line:

A young mind teasing the aged elite
Causing a pondering at wisdom not their own
Earthly parents blinded by the throng
A strong independence, to them, so wrong


Great take on the topic! I like how you used the "he left" repitition.
05/23/11
Excellent work crafting each event into five short sentences. I especially like the part ... They saw the hope ... They left! Thankfully, our Lord did not leave us behind, but left to prepare a place for us, and to bring us back to Him. He is no dropout as our Creator and Maker, for He will return.
Congrats on your highly commended. This piece is so well versed. I really like this.