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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fragrance (10/24/05)

TITLE: Sweet Fragrance
By c clemons
10/30/05


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“What is that, Father?”

“What? My Son.”

“That sweet fragrance?”
“Is it the bouquet of lilac or lavender?”
“Or is it the smell of the air after a rain?”
“Or could it be the sweet smell of a baby’s head?”

“No, my Son.”

“Could it be the aroma of delicious food?”
“Could it be the odor of the pine and the spruce?”
“Perhaps it is the essence of a sweet perfume?”

“No, my Son.”

“Is it a whiff of peace?”
“Is it the scent of joy?”
“Or the elusive smell of happiness?”

“No, my Son.”

“Is it the sweet smell of victory?”
“Or the sweet smell of success?”
“Could it be the soothing balm of love?”

“No, my Son.”

“Then tell me Father, what is it?”

“Listen and you will hear.”
“It’s my children,
“Offering up praises, for some even in their pain.”
“But it is their prayers that you smell.”
“It comes to me like a sweet savour.”

“Of all the fragrances is that your favorite?”

“Yes, my Son.”


Rev. 5:8


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Jan Ackerson 11/01/05
This is a beautiful look at the relationship between the Father and the Son. I think it gets lost behind all the quotation marks, which aren't really necessary in poetry. Each stanza is obviously a different speaker, or if you wanted to differentiate them further, you could use italics and plain text--less distracting to the reader. Your words choice is marvelous; who knew there were so many synonyms for fragrance? Thanks!
Garnet Miller 11/02/05
I liked this poem! It is comforting to know that even when we feel our praise of the Master is inadequate, it leaves a sweet aroma in His presence! Thanks:)
dub W11/03/05
Compiling of quote marks is unnecessary, indeed in poetry quote marks are rare. I liked the way this free verse set up, it has a lot of potential. Thanks for posting.
Nina Phillips11/03/05
I agree about the quotation marks being unnecessary. Keep writing. God bless you,
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Deborah Porter 11/07/05
Hi Clarissa. I just wanted to pop in very quickly to let you know that you did very well in the Fragrance Challenge, making it in to the top 30. You ranked 7th in the Level 2 list, and 26th overall (out of 145 entries). So give yourself a pat on the back, and be encouraged.

With Jan's comment about using italics to differentiate the speakers, I tend to agree, because of the style of your piece. It is possible to do this, but you need to know a little bit of html coding to add before and after the words you want to see in italics. If you'd like to know how to do it, just send me a private message and I'll let you know.

Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)