The Official Writing Challenge
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Your last sentence is wonderful, a great way to tie the whole piece together.

I'm not sure about using "she" to refer to the flower; it distracted me a bit.

I like your word choices; the piece appealed to the senses and I could almost experience it with you.
Like mentioned above, there are some antecedant issues. Put a space between paragraphs for readability. Thanks for posting.
Sense this was on the shortened side, and the way that was it was written-something like prose, I believe it is ok without spaces between paragraphs (that's me though). Calling the rose a "her" is that like calling a hurricane Wilma? Just kidding. I liked your story, especially the ending with the title. God bless ya, littlelight
A wonderful comaparison -would make a great devitional piece
Well this is a lovely piece of writing. Very well written and thought out.