The Official Writing Challenge
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Creative POV. Great job!
09/03/09
An interesting and creative take on the topic with a moral lesson thrown in too...enjoyed your story.
09/05/09
Great take on very human traits. We need more cranes and less geese!
09/09/09
I love your descriptions. Very good writing and nice analogy.
Quite an interesting story. I personally had trouble reading it--merely because animal kingdom type stories don't grab me. However the premise for this is very good.

I believe if the last line/question were left off, this would come in for a stronger finish.

Nice work on the descriptions.
09/10/09
What a great piece of writing. You'll place high with this one! Kudos!
09/10/09
Yay, Kim!