The Official Writing Challenge
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07/13/17
I liked the flow and repetitive phrases that linked this piece together. Good, thought-provoking message.

Red-Ink: Proofread a bit more before submitting (look at your 4th line)
07/13/17
I like the form and the sentiment of this poem. The fourth line is a bit wonky, but we all need to be more careful about proofreading. Not quite sure the connection to the topic, but I really like this poem. Keep writing!
07/14/17
Loved your sentiment and loved your words!

Well done,
Blessings~
Nice piece!
We should work hard at proofreading our piece, it makes us better writers.
I feel a little more linking words would connect the message better.
Wonderful message!