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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Bold (emotionally) (08/30/07)
It was a bold move
To welcome the news the angel brought
That the long-awaited Messiah
Foretold by her nation's prophets
Would become incarnate
In the womb of her adolescent body
And through her
Be born into the world he loved
And longed to save

It was a bold move
Wearied and weakened in body
To make her way through the pressing crowd
Each vying for a better view
Of this man of oracle and miracle
Through the press of sweating bodies
The twist of dusty feet
She stretched her arm
And her hand touched his robe

It was a bold move
To enter the house
Where the men had gathered
Knowing that all eyes would fall on her
That her reputation would scream out
That she of all people was not fit
To touch such a person
Let alone pour her precious offering
Upon His feet
And wipe them with her hair

It was a bold move
To return to the garden alone
Searching for her beloved
Whom she had seen die
Whom she had loved in life
And so recently loved in death
To view the now empty tomb
And ask if He had been taken away
Or where she might find Him

It was a bold move
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Jennifer Johnson
09/07/07
Nicely done. A great reminder that the "safe" path isn't always the most productive or rewarding. Great reminders of the bold biblical characters to which we owe our gratitude.
Sherrie Jackson
09/07/07
Excellent poem. You stayed true to the form throughout, which is more difficult than many realize.

Favorite part: "into the world he loved/And longed to save." Very, very nice.

Great job!
Anothervoice Sunstar
09/07/07
A precious commentary. : ) Hard to believe you are at a "beginner" level of writing. Great form, great content.
Loretta Leonard
09/08/07
The boldness of Biblical characters challenges each of us to step out of our own comfort zone. Your poem flows naturally and you make it sound so easy to put writing into verse. I really liked it.
Mark Bell
09/08/07
Good meter. Great flow. Nice imagery of each scene. You conveyed each scene separately and created a wonderful whole.
Janice Cartwright
09/10/07
Your words balanced perfectly in their stanzas and the message they carried was powerful.
Linda Watson Owen
09/10/07
Beautifully written verse! You may have entered this at beginner level, but this is not beginner writing. ;-) I see gold in 'them thar' lines!
Laury Hubrich 
09/12/07
Great job! I love how you wrote about so many in such a short piece.
Carolyn Baney
09/13/07
Simply beautiful!
Diane Bertrand
09/13/07
"Your faith has made you whole." Makes you want be be bold!Beautiful piece.
Patricia Todd
09/17/07
Superb piece of writing. Well deserved commendation.
Mona Purvis
06/01/09
Anne, this is just wonderful. Your writing style fit the topic and told such a wonderful story. It's one of those that make you stop and ponder. Loved it.
Mona