The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/07
I like this. You did a very good job with the emotions portrayed here. Your character is real. Well done.
Liked this. This could go anywhere from here. Good beginning of a short story.
Wow, I felt like the child, empty inside, desperately trying to get it filled. What a wonderful story.
The best part is the presence of hope given in the final line. We all need that.
02/13/07
This is good. I really enjoyed it..
I really felt your character's emotions. Wonderful work! God bless your efforts.