The Official Writing Challenge
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10/17/09
I think your final line accurately captures the essence of this entire article, and it is a great end to your piece.
10/21/09
I like the honest and sincere voice you have in your writing.

One of the first things I began working on as a newbie here at Faithwriters (still am!) is striving to avoid "passive voice". This great article by Leah got me started in the right direction: http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=24146
Also, when self editing, read each sentence carefully. Is it really pertinent to the overall message/feel of the story?

Your last line was beautiful! Keep writing!