The Official Writing Challenge
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06/01/09
I like the story. It was moving and I could relate. Good job. I especially liked the visual, when she was saying she was scared and then crumpled on the floor. So free from outwardly trying to hold it together... I could feel the emomtion in the simple statement.
06/02/09
I like the story very much. It's creative and heart warming. Your referencing Isaiah 42:16 wraps up the story very nicely.
06/02/09
My little one was afraid of the dark, too...

A space between paragraphs, please, for your readers' sake!

Sweet story, with both literal and metaphorical light and dark--nicely done.
06/03/09
exellent. Love the whole story and can relate to it! Yes please to the paragraph spacing as it makes it easier to read and not lose ones place!