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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Anger (01/24/05)
I’d felt your anger before, I was no stranger to it. But I felt it most decidedly on the side of my cheek the day I finally got up the nerve to walk out. I couldn’t take your insane outbursts anymore, and even though I was just a kid, and I thought the term ‘streetwise’ meant knowing what road my school was on, I didn’t care. anything to escape the torrent of filthy abuse spewing out of your tobacco-stained, alcohol stinking mouth.

I sound angry myself, but I’m not. Why should I be now? I’m free. I don’t need you, I don’t need anyone. I’ve been totally on my own and totally carefree for 5 years now. No-one bothers me and I don’t bother them. I talk to people only as much as I have to, to get by.

Like my boss. He cares for me way more than you ever did, and you were supposed to be my family, my big brother. I run errands for him, drop off parcels and stuff. I’ve never been in trouble yet so I don’t ask questions, just do my job and get the paper I need to eat. I don’t have to worry about rent or anything because I have my own designated corner in an abandoned house downtown. I live there with a bunch of junkies. They never bother me because to them I’m just a bum street kid and they never suspect I’m making bank doing my job.

Yeah, I’m happy, and I don’t need you. I don’t need anyone.

There’s this weird preacher man who keeps coming into our neighbourhood and trying to tell us all that we’re missing out on something. He says we need people, we need relationships- close ones with people we can trust. Well, not me. I learned what it means to trust someone you love. It means a fist upside the jaw, that’s what it means.

This preacher keeps at it, and the other day he started hassling me personally, can you believe it? He says I’ve got anger and I need to let it go. I said the angriest person I know is my big brother, and compared to you man, I’m totally sweet. There’s nothing wrong with my attitude.

It did get a little unnerving when the preacher started asking me how I was sleeping at night. And I admit it was really weird when he told me he knew I had really bad stomach cramps sometimes. He says that’s a common problem and it comes from holding anger inside.

Nah, what does he know? I’m not angry!!! I’M NOT!

I don’t need you, I don’t need a preacher on my back, I don’t need his God or his big fancy book, I don’t need love…

I don’t need anything and I don’t need anybody.
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Karen Deikun
01/31/05
I thought this piece was really good. It was a different take on the toll that anger takes. It left me thinking and I was totally interested in the character and the outcome of their life. Good job!
Carol Sutley
01/31/05
Goodness! what an emotion this evoked! Well done!! Wonderfully written...keep on writing.
Crista Darr
01/31/05
Gritty, raw and so very true. This story can speak to so many hearts. Overall fantastic writing but I wonder about your ending. Is there enough light to show the way out?
Carol Buist
01/31/05
You made your point very clear - we are angry and then hurt, and we harden ourselves from everyone and everything, even redeeming love.
Norma OGrady
02/02/05
Thank you for sharing
Yeshua bless
donna robinson
02/03/05
This reads like the opening chapter of a book. I hope you are expanding on it because you made me want to know this kid, see what happens to him, he's gritty and he's on the edge and the reader just wants to know more!!
Deborah Anderson
02/05/05
Powerful message in your article. God bless you.
Debbie OConnor
02/06/05
Well done. Your writing was clear and vivid and the emotions were raw. You left your guy angry and lost, but your reader can clearly see what he needs from the interaction with the preacher. Good job.
Lynda Lee Schab 
02/06/05
I agree - there is a powerful message in this piece. You did a great job of showing how anger isn't always loud and obnoxious and obvious - often we silently harbor it deep inside and it ends up making us physically sick. Anger does destroy and you expressed that vividly.
Great job,
Lynda
Kathy Ellis
02/06/05
You left me wanting more. I think that's a good thing.