The Official Writing Challenge
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08/01/08
Interesting story! I am sad for the parrot though ... ROFL. While Martha was distracted with all her preparations, Mary sat at the Lord's feet listening to His word. You have conveyed this message quite well in ending your story.
I kinda felt sorry for the parrot, but I loved the lesson you wove in here. This has excellent descriptions and some wonderful touches of culture inside. Thank you for sharing this piece. I enjoyed the read! ^_^
08/02/08
The second half of your story caught my interest. Arjun's focus is what we need to stay on track with the Lord. I struggled a lttle with understanding your cultural concepts in the beginning (and I'm probably 'imagination challenged' but what is a 'visor belt?) Overall though, a good example of the topic.