The Official Writing Challenge
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Well written and very engaging. I enjoyed this very much. It pulled me in and kept me reading to the end.
02/05/16
Well done!

God bless~
This story is rich in atmosphere, and made me feel as if I were shadowing the MC.
02/09/16
There are people who love to wander and are unable to stay in any one place for very long.

This well written story had a wonderful conclusion.
02/10/16
I've always been intrigued by hobos and glad to find your story. It held my attention all the way through. I thoroughly enjoyed it! Very well done.

God Bless,
I enjoyed this glimpse into history and such a different POV from my own.

Great voice and great writing. My only red ink would be the transition from the present tense when the boy is leaving to when he's a man, been back home, and gotten a job on the rails. It seemed abrupt to me.

I especially liked the MC's prayer. It almost brought tears to my eyes.

God bless.