The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/15
I liked the way you built the suspense for your reader and then wrapped the story up with a happy ending. Too many parents do not keep a watchful eye on their kids around water--good reminder!
08/29/15
A great cameo of innocence and relaxation, invaded by well-described concerns, where innocence happily wins out.
Well done.
08/29/15
I loved your story and your writing. Excellent.

God bless~
08/29/15
The forlorn cry of a seagulls drew me into your story right away. Suspense continued to build when you couldn't find the child. It it so scary when you can't find a child by the water.
09/01/15
My heart skipped a beat during the reading of the story. It is so easy for a child to wander away in an instant, but God's watchful eye was seen through the image of the seagulls
09/03/15
Your story was told so well; I hope it ends up in the top 20.
Congratulations on ranking 12th overall! Happy Dance!