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By Graham Insley
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And I must tell you, "This is not the way it should be done."
What you've been doing here is trying to ruin my life,
As you've led me along a road full of trouble and strife.
Yes, I’m talking to you now, don’t you look the other way,
You had better listen to me, to what I have to say.
By following you I have gained a bucket full of shame,
You’ve used me up and worn me out, and then you’ve left me drained.
So Satan, I’ve come to kick down your door,
I don't want you in my life anymore,
Don't ever want to even see your face,
Satan, old man, just get out of this place.
And hey, Old Nick, no tricks behind my back,
I’m not fooling now, I’ll cut you no slack,
You’re not wanted, not needed or desired,
Got the message old son. Satan, you’re fired!
You’ve got your papers and your marching orders are given,
You were defeated old man, by a Lord who is risen.
You nailed Him to a cross, you thought a sacrificial goat,
And then sat back on your heels, probably to smirk and gloat.
But your smirking days are over; you came up short right there.
Even death could never hold Life’s Eternal, Righteous Heir.
He went down to your domain, kicked your butt and came right back,
He looked you squarely in the eye and said, “Satan, you’re sacked.”
On your bike! Get the next coach out of town.
Get out! You're no longer wanted around.
It’s time to go, get started, pack your bags,
Take your lies with you, they're filthy old rags.
You've no honour, no merit anymore.
What are you waiting for, here's the door.
Head off, be gone, vamoose, go, scram and scat,
Get out of here, Satan. Don't come back.
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Head off, be gone, vamoose, go, scram and scat,
Get out of here, Satan. Don't come back.
But it wasn't bad, it was wonderfully fluid and had a great rhythm to it that I slipped into and was at the end before I knew it.
Great wordsmithing and great message!
Still a great read!
We need good fighting poems and stories to stir us up and this one sure did that.
God bless you.
There were a few lines that seemed a bit long and where the rhythm could have been tweaked just a bit, but nothing major. Over all, it flowed quite well.
Nice job.