The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a masterpiece, creative and beautiful in every word. A favorite, for sure!
11/06/09
Fantastic poem, showing how children look at heaven, and how the parent (in the poem, you) explains it. I think you painted such a colorful and artistic picture of heaven. It sounds so beautiful, I can hardly wait to get there. And I know it will be even more picturesque and colorful that you described...Wonderful job. God's blessings....Helen
I think this is amazing---I know that I could never write anything as well as you have here!! The descriptions are beautiful, and the passion with which the mother speaks to her teenage son is so real.
Poetry isn't my forte--which makes this one all the more special to me, because it really is wonderful! I love the subject and the truths this piece reveals. The contrast between the imagery of the colors and the white of purity was well presented. Good job, and enjoyable read.
Oh, so wonderful in every way, dear friend! You've word-painted Heaven in such a heartwarming way that God must be smiling as He frames this piece and hangs it on Heaven's walls! I love the appealing meter you've used in this one. What a master you are! Congratulations!
11/12/09
Love your creativity! I had to smile at "what translation are you using?" :) Congrats, Mariane!
Woo Hoo for your well-deserving win---happy dancin' with you!
11/13/09
Such a colorful poem is a revelation of all the rainbow colors hiding in white light. Your last sentence is my favorite, tying your lines together in a beautiful package.
11/18/09
Good Job! Once I got the rhythm, it was wonderful to walk through this conversation so full of wisdom and insight. Cerulean?? Where did you find such a cool word? Beautiful poem dear girl.